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Friday Fictioneers – Steps

26 April, 2013

Last week I failed. Or the muse failed me. One or the other. This week though, I have made up for it. Here is another FriFic, inspired again by the prompt supplied by Rochelle, the Queen of FriFic. This second offering is inspired by the word steps more than the pic itself, and therefore I haven’t included it here but you can view it on the link above or by checking my other FriFic effort.

As usual, I have written 100 words. As usual, I order beg invite you to comment.

 

There are exactly seventy four steps from his front door to the pub. He has counted them many times. On the way back it is probably twice as many but by then he can’t handle the maths.

The first step is always the hardest, the one he fights most. He sits in his chair, shaking, feet tapping, desperately trying to concentrate on the television.  And suddenly he is at his front door. He tries to turn back, he tries to fight the magnetism. Not tonight, he tells himself, be strong. But he takes that first step. Tomorrow he will resist.

 

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13 Comments
  1. This one is excellent. I don’t think you know just how good it is, so I will tell you. You have captured the mind of an alcoholic, or anyone with an obsession, but an alcoholic especially. The last line is telling.

    Also, the part about the steps was clever… yes, a few more on the way home.

    • Very kind comments Ted. I’m not an alcoholic but to some degree i fight various temptations and wants and tried to draw on that.
      I have staggered home from the pub a few times – the zigzag “two steps forward, one step back” journey!

  2. RG… I think you should consider posting this one on Rochelle’s page. I know you don’t like to ‘toot your own horn’, but don’t you think that sometimes it is more important to share a piece of really good writing.

    You invited me to make a comment, and I have… now do something with it, or I’m telling Rochelle.

  3. Morbid Insanity permalink

    Sometimes is so difficult to resist. Specially because we think we’re strong enough to stop (resist) whenever we want. And specially because we know we have tomorrow and tomorrow we can (try, maybe) resist.
    I share tedstrutz’s opinion: “This one is excellent.”

    • But does tomorrow ever come? We have to break the habit to be able to change

      • Morbid Insanity permalink

        For some people, tomorrow always comes. That’s the problem!
        “We have to break the habit to be able to change”
        I agree!

  4. That’s good. And it’s Everyman. We all face our demons, large and small (and I personally, I’m delighted to say, keep losing the good fight. Viva lack of will power.).

  5. Dear RG,
    Stop lurking. ;). Again, well written piece.

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