Friday Fictioneers – Revenant
I was at a work meeting in London on Wednesday so Rochelle‘s email with this week’s prompt pic
from Sarah Potter came to me on my phone.
On the way back, I had time to kill so wrote my FriFic and – get this – for the first time ever I wrote it with an actual pen onto a piece of paper. I have the world’s worst handwriting so rather than make you have to try to read this:
I’ve typed it out for you below. Feel free to read it, and also to visit the Froggy Island to see the Fics everyone else has shared.
The silence was broken only by echoing final notes from the stunned pianist. A figure, silhouetted against the evening sun, filled the saloon doorway.
With slow, spur-rattling steps, he approached the bar, downed two fingers of whisky and addressed the nervous customers.
“I left this town five years gone, with only the clothes on my back and the sixgun in my holster. I fought, shot and killed to survive. They call me Dusty Zapata, and I’m back.”
An elderly woman stood.
“Darren Cooper,” she said, “yer Mam’s been worried sick. Sit down and stop showing off. And clean them shoes!”
Very nice, and wow for writing it down. I haven’t written anything by hand for years!
An old-fashioned game of ‘cowboys and indians’ – do kids still play that? It’s nice sometimes to go back to writing with a good pen on paper, but your handwriting is terrible 🙂
I think cowboys & Indians is timeless?
Are you even supposed to call it cowboys and ‘indians’ these days?
You’re not supposed to call anything the things we used to.
Admittedly that wasn’t my bestest writing as it was only a draft but yes, handwriting has never been my speciality
Ya! Nice one. You can never hide from the ones who knew you as a child!
Your past will always find you out!
Dear TRG,
I guess he’d better stay away from his hometown if he wants to keep up appearances. Loved this one. (No argument about your handwriting. 😉 )
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you Rochelle. He may have that hard man image out on the savanna but back at home he will always be Darren Cooper!
Gotta love that one! Giggles. Yet another reason why I don’t go home…
Thanks Jelli. Your shoes need cleaning too eh? 😉
What shoes? Which box are they packed in?
😀
Dude! I love it.
Thank you Sir
Hey, this is laugh out loud funny! Brilliant.
Click to read my FriFic!
Thanks Keith
That was a lot of fun, Sir!
Thanks Dale
Ha!!! Fun.
Thanks for reading!
Funny! There’s always someone with a hairpin standing by if you get too inflated.😣
Grr auto-correct! I said HATpin!
A lesson for us all, we can never hide from the past. (and I enjpyed your autocorrect 🙂 )
Really liked this story. Not least because I was watching Gunfight at the OK Corrall last night!
Thanks Rachel. I’ve never seen that, I should add it to my list
Ha… caught in the act.. maybe not such a menace as he wanted to be portrayed… wonder what mom will say if she hears that he have been drinking whiskey?
I’m sure his Mum will have something to say when she hears what he’s been up to – and not just the whisky drinking
Wonderful! Takes a woman to put a kid in his proper place 🙂
So true! Thanks for reading 🙂
*Claps excitedly* Ha! I love it when someone gets pulled down a peg. brilliant.
*bows graciously* why thank you Ellen
Wonder whether I should commend the whacky humour of Darren, or wonder what these kids watch these days! 😉
Neither the shoes nor the whiskey is going to make his mom happy 😂
Thanks for reading Ritika. There’s no humour from Darren, he does see himself as Dusty as do others. Those who have known him since he was a baby see him differently though 🙂
I don’t think his Mum will be too proud!